The Fox and the mouse
The snow was deflating underneath the foxes and the mouse’s feet. Then I heard ice cracking, split straight through the middle. There I go under right into the water. Sinking to the bottom I seen a giant fluffy red foxy dude coming down to help me. Once the fox push me to the top I ran I looked back for a sec and the fox wasn’t there i went to the edge and it was going down. I got circled around with owl next minute I had a tail around me growl i heard and the owl flew away.
perfect writing, I like the part when you said I seen a giant red foxy dude coming down to help me
Hi like the blog. I like how you said the snow was deflating. next time can you check your spelling.